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The Trap – Piece 1

February 12, 2011

This is the first piece of a science fiction story title “The Trap.” It follows a lab rat placed out into the wilderness of a university. Running at just under 6000 words, I will post pieces around 500-1000 words in length.

 

The Trap

He didn’t know what words were. The concept was too complex for a rat to begin to understand, but he understood words. He was trained in a plethora of human noises and they each had meaning for him. In that sense he understood words perfectly well. Maybe it fell far short of language, what all the tests and experiments on him aimed to measure or even achieve, but he could listen to humans gasp out their noises and know, on a fundamental level, what was what.

At that moment there was only a single one of these words he was thinking of. To him it might have sounded something like “neesum,” a soft hissing humming sound, not quite the name of a Japanese car company. Rats don’t have names, another human concept, but if they wanted him to come, they called “neesum”. If they wanted his attention, they said “neesum”. When the big human alpha held him in his hands and stroked the brown path of fur between his ears, he murmured “neesum”. If this rat had a name, it would have been Neesum.

At that moment, it was the soothing sound of his name he thought of. That was all he could do as he watched the pack of rats that had recently accepted him and the horror they did. “Neesum,” again and again as four males scuttled next to each other for a better seat at the feast. “Neesum,” as the big brown alpha shifted his round backside around, a pink and purple-eyed pup in his clutches, and then sunk his yellow incisors through the infants soft, blind face. “Neesum” as they he watched this new family devour his children.

The word had given all the comfort it could. Neesum left the den and ran through the dark tunnels in any direction. His nose led him while his mind filled with thoughts. They were primeval rat thoughts, but not totally. Over these came human words. Human words that represented ideas. Together they mingled and stirred around in his brain in a thick dark brew.

Neesum made it to one of the exits. He smelled around the sides of the red bricks that were the foundation walls of the university library. He stuck his nose outside, wiggled his whiskers and took in the scents of the darkness. Centipedes, the grey dust layered on the dirt, the sickly sweet smell of females on heat. The bitches were chased away and now must be scavenging for food somewhere under the university building. Their troubles would be nearly forgotten, while Neesum’s had only just begun.

In a desperate fashion, still chased by the images of his children and these new, alien thoughts, he let his white body flop ungraciously into the dust. Shaking himself off he went on his way, skirting the walls beneath the library. Artificial light drew near as he came closer to the night outside. There was now only one foot of shadow between shelter and the dangers of the open night. With the short-sightedness of rats he could only see the bright circles cast from the lamp posts. He pressed up against the wall as his fear of open spaces crept up his tail. His little heart thump-thump-thumped against the cool bricks. There was a path he remembered, it was why he was here, though he had no idea or memory of why he remembered it or was compelled to seek it out. He would never realize that this was was the first part of a revenge formulating. His instincts were in control guided by the mysterious new words and feelings.

Blinking his dark brown eyes at the light, he wheeled back into the darkness, yet still stayed close to the path. From one support-pylon to another he made small dashes, skirting the light, and followed its course until he was brought to the other end of shelter, the corner at the edge of the building.

Once more he stared out at the path. At this distance the light was just a bright blur. He stared into it, like a child first stares into a television, entranced. His instincts whirled in his head. Human words and images joined them. There was that alien feeling inside him again, fighting against his rat instincts. There was no plan of thought. A rat does not plan, they do what they need to at each given moment. If a rat needed food, it foraged. If a rat was in danger, it ran. Simple answers for simple needs. But Neesum’s needs were not simple. Neesum could not comprehend what the reason was behind the need, he could only react to it. He did just what a rat would never do; he stepped out into the lamp-light and into the open night.

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2 comments

  1. I dig.
    is there going to be any more to this story?? i liked neesum, obviouslly based on the legendary university rat-
    Muffslam.
    and posted the day after his birthday.
    cheerio


    • That’s the rat! I will post another today and the the rest throughout the week.



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